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People look at it and they see
That's an ordinary fridge
But after opening it you can see
Viands contained in it ready to served
Fridge looks at the peopletaking them out
And it laughs inwardly
That they'll be eating frozen food

Stupid fridge
It doesn't have any idea about rules which it has to obey
And it's astonished that people can't become sick

The fridge starts then to chill the food with singing
It brings on dissonances unpredicted by its design engineer
It changes chilled dishes into icy cold ones
The engineer seeing it decides to let it for experiments
In order to make people realize this and start avoid it
They do so
Unwise fridge
Still ices

Then there happens a situation that the fridge becomes fully frigid
They take out the rest of food able for consumption
It is transported away to the refuse dump

Mindless fridge
Still chills its inside
And in the end it becomes the being of coolness
And after killing itself it will lead its spirit out the dump
To still ices everything what it will touch
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~DESTRUCTION-BUNNY Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I will never look at my fridge the same way ever again! xD
You did an excellent job at portraing a fridges life and perspective, and I admire that.
I also like that this is quite original, something you don't read everyday, and something that changes your view on your everyday life. Again, you have a great ability to express emotion, and very good narrative skills!
The only point I don't like again is the lack of flow, but I think that'll go away and seem less forced when you write more and more. And maybe it's just me, so...we'll see. :)
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~EwaGladka Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much - both for the comment and the fave :)

Well, at the beginning I'll have to learn how to write with the flow in Polish, and later I'll try to do so in English. It will may also help me in my language skills.
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~DESTRUCTION-BUNNY Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome :)

I am quite sure it'll help you, it helped me with my English skills at least, now I can write almost like a native speaker.
And I have no doupt that you'll get really good.
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