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The Queen is being carried
by a dress
faded to grey
patched
All the pearlies
shitty odds and ends
have lost their glamour
They terrify with their embedness

The Queen is sliding
is looking her crown on the head up
(nowadays it is bending pretty often)
She hopes
her subjects still think
it's made out of gold
Sometimes she deceives herself
only sometimes, cause she's too inteligent
to do it often

The Queen is going upstairs
She's irritated
cause the cleaning lady
(as old as the Queen)
didn't mop the stairs after she washed them
She
this poor naive woman!
is probably on the run in the city
does the illegal abortions
They are conceded as long
as the Queen is able to play a fool

The Queen is finally letting go on a banister
She's heading for a terrace
The crowds of mushrooms and algas
are flocking under it

The Queen is starting a speech
She wants to point out some mistakes made in the prime of her life
when she was covered with blood
she was carrying a pope's tiara
and pitting on a cross without Christ
who was removed by her erotomaniac father
She wants also to resemble a moment of the big change
when she threw the tiara away and started to tread it down
sleeping it in the gore of her almost husbands
Covered up with a bare cross like a shield

The Queen's reigns were very long
She brought the laws of strict morality into force in
and she ordered people to follow them
Copy the prohibitions and warrants down
chalking
on the little black tablets
Sitting in the company of other scapegraces
But she wouldn't like to resemble
the hidden darkness of these times
She'd like to resemble the power of the white flag
redly partitioned
covering the 20% of Earth
(of course not the whole Earth
but only the lands
cause the sea
naturally
doesn't like human creations)
When the human being knew
he is the one who should do
the most courageous deeds

The Queen feels strange
when she has to speak
about the last years
When she
tired with all these wars
backed out of life
She was receiving successive politicians
in accordance with the court etiquette
bringing her children on divorcees up
And she was swishing
in a comical hat  
on various ceremonies
but she was always staying dignified
When spe speaks about this period
she isn't able to use simple symbols and myths
(except one
but it's harmul
for her majesty)

The Queen hopes
her subjects listened carefully
to her words once again
And that was truth
the proof is the accelerated fission
of bacteriums
One of the algas fell in love with a mushroom
They both combined climbed up the ruler's foot
Inspired by Laibach's "Anglia" www.youtube.com/watch?v=DgmX_A…
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I don't feel there the need for the mature content tag other than the fact that there was the mention of an abortion... well that is your choice :) I have nothing against that! I enjoyed the work. That is the most basic statement i shall give. There was again (like in the previous work) some portions where there were expressions that felt a bit out of place but again, I was fine with that. The story was really vivid and well told.

The queen and her appearance and how she is moving to address her subjects and all. And the speech that she makes. The theme is quite a unique one and that is one reason why I enjoy this work a lot.

The ending in which the algas (algea?) fell in love with the mushroom... well worded. You wrote this quite well... AND it is quite old!
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EwaGladka Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much :)

Well, I decided to leave the mature content tag just in case, even if I know that there are mature people, who can be unprepared for such work. I still remember the way how my mom reacted on this poem, when she was reading it for the first time (she was very shocked :D).
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You are welcome :)

I can imagine how your mother would have reacted :nod: that is because this was probably not a topic on which she was expecting you to write as :D
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EwaGladka Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
WEll, as she later told me, this poem was "too dark" for her :XD: Shortly after reading it by her I gave it to my father and the only thing, which he didn't like, was the fact that it's a free verse poem (for him a poem is a text, which rhymes), but - as he said - he's used to the fact that I don't use rhymes ^^;
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well this work was good :) I do prefer rhymes as well but I try to keep poetry feel "general". DO try rhyme as well :D
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EwaGladka Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'll try :D There's even one poem ("Burza" - "The Storm") written by me with free verse, which in my opinion would be much better, if I'd use rhyme. I'll ry to make something with it :)
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well then try to rhyme :D you can use the net for that as well! Just go slow and work with each line properly :)
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EwaGladka Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
OK :)
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thouching, your writing has rhytm :)
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EwaGladka Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :)
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SgtPossum Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2010
Whoa. Wonderful metaphors and analogies, and a great message. Love it.
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Elise-Lucy Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Nie ma to jak zasrana arystokracja, chciałoby się powiedzieć :p Tjaa, przykład idzie z góry, a w tym przypadku lepiej jest przykładów nie naśladować.
Wiersz porusza sporo poważnych problemów, z którymi ludzkość się borykała i borykać się będzie.
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EwaGladka Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Cóż, jak człowiek nie ma do roboty nic poza rządzeniem, , a przez resztę dnia się obijać ;)
To działa w obie strony - górze też może nie chcieć się starać o dawanie przykładu, jeśli widzą, że chłopi nie przepadają i za dobrymi panami (np. w rabacji galicyjskiej ofiarami byli i ci członkowie szlachty, którzy dbali o swoich chłopów).

Poza tym dziękuję za fava :)
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Elise-Lucy Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Bo to jest taki owczy pęd, że jak wszyscy chłopi szli mordować, to ci dobrze traktowani nie chcieli być "gorsi".
Nie na za co ^^
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AndySerrano Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2010  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
I love the vivid manner in which you wrote this. It was very easy to mentally picture this in my mind, almost like a movie. The queen seems like an imbecile and an insult to her people who are probably just waiting for her to die.
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EwaGladka Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
The inspiration for this poem was a music video and tha's the reason why it's so vivid ;)

"The queen seems like an imbecile and an insult to her people who are probably just waiting for her to die."
Well, they treat her just like a relic of the old times and they let her live just habitually. But they certainly wouldn't cry after her death.
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jcphotos Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2010
love this!!!!!
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EwaGladka Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you - also for the fave :D
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